London, UK
Marc So she did it! She guessed your picture correctly! hahaha :) How are the holidays going? I'm keeping my fingers crossed that you will check this and see my message!
re: London!
Marc Nice story, Joana! :) It seems like you guys had lots of fun on your trip to London. As for your writing, I like the fact that it's extensive and that you use a range of vocabulary and connectors. Also, your use of the past simple is adequate. In future writings, you may want to consider these points: 1.- You "take" photos or pictures, you don't "do" them. 2.- "But" always goes after a comma, never after a period: "We didn't go to the London Eye because it was very expensive, but we went to the towers of Parliament..." 3.- Revise your writing to avoid careless mistakes such as: - Lack of punctuation (commas and periods). For example: "I went to London with my parent my sister and my grandmother" or "...and we went to Hambleys the most espectecular toy shop we bought some toys there because me and my sister love them." - Spelling mistakes. For example: "bye" or "plain." - Capital letters. For example: "London eye." See you in class! :) Your favourite teacher ( ;) !!!), Marc
re: London!
Joana has not added a travel plan yet
Marc Nice story, Joana! :) It seems like you guys had lots of fun on your trip to London. As for your writing, I like the fact that it's extensive and that you use a range of vocabulary and connectors. Also, your use of the past simple is adequate. In future writings, you may want to consider these points: 1.- You "take" photos or pictures, you don't "do" them. 2.- "But" always goes after a comma, never after a period: "We didn't go to the London Eye because it was very expensive, but we went to the towers of Parliament..." 3.- Revise your writing to avoid careless mistakes such as: - Lack of punctuation (commas and periods). For example: "I went to London with my parent my sister and my grandmother" or "...and we went to Hambleys the most espectecular toy shop we bought some toys there because me and my sister love them." - Spelling mistakes. For example: "bye" or "plain." - Capital letters. For example: "London eye." See you in class! :) Your favourite teacher ( ;) !!!), Marc
supersonic99 okay i will correct it! thanks :)
Marc So she did it! She guessed your picture correctly! hahaha :) How are the holidays going? I'm keeping my fingers crossed that you will check this and see my message!